Dimensional Warriors: Novelization.
For my first time doing this I'd like to open up with a few things.
Mission Statement:
What I want to achieve with this piece is an intellectual novel for the common man, something that can cross all media and excel in all of them.
The Hook:
A transgendered woman has to find her friends while fighting against impossible odds.
If you want to read the first draft, you can download the completed first three parts from the link above. These are the parts I'm focusing on editing: The Gathering, Battle Before the Tower, Into the Maw
Excerpt:
This will basically be a favorite scene out of the new content to give you guys a taste of what I'm working on.
The Gathering: Neko, Vyrse, Raven, Henry and Eddy find an army bunker where Ben is hiding with lucy
Questions:
Not entirely happy with Haiden as Pahhur's family name. Suggestions?
Not 100% behind Zephos' weapon choice. Suggestions?
Situations or ordeals the characters should deal with?
Plotholes?
Notes:
-Added a LOT of scenes. Mostly to The Gathering. This includes a lot of tension building scenes, and introductions for new characters and antagonists.
-New characters:
--Henry; a self-important businessman and coward.
--Eddy; an Irish family man, companion, and spy.
--Ben; Eddy's son, a hyperactive punk that likes guns.
--Lucy; Girl who was sensitive to the Time distortion caused by the Dimension Bomb that made the whole mess. As of right now I have not decided whether to have her wake up or not.
--Beth; Punctual and realistic doctor.
--Names not set in stone, not entirely attached to any of them.
-Added several ticking clock elements to both The Gathering and Battle Beneath the Tower.
-Changed the conflict between Neko and Metudo vastly.
-Added all of Pahhur's scenes.
-Changed Zephos' weapon thinking about using chain blades ala Vivi's Peacock Slashers.
-Added conflict to practically every scene in The Gathering.
Thank you for reading!
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